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3/1/2011

1) In what ways can I better prove my thesis in my secondary sources?
2) Do I need to eaborate on my thesis?
3) Are there any missing details in my discussion/conclusion essay that would make it better?

4 Comments

Frankie

3/1/2011 12:55:40 am

I think your thesis is very clear, i can think of anything you can improve on. Like i said your thesis is clear you dont have to elaborate. You have a solid conclusion/discusion page, no need to add stuff. Overall great blog, did an amazing job.

JazzyWazzy

3/1/2011 01:02:45 am

I think that you you did a good job elaborating on your thesis because you gave many examples that th affect had on the audience. You can add more examples to your that can prove your thesis better. there are no missing details and look over grammer.

Raunaq

3/1/2011 01:12:30 am

1) In what ways can I better prove my thesis in my secondary sources?
-Not much,You did a great job.

2) Do I need to eaborate on my thesis?
Nope,Your thesis is perfect.

3) Are there any missing details in my discussion/conclusion essay that would make it better?
I would like to see more information on the episode where Peter finds out he's Mexican,that would really help you.

Arshad

3/1/2011 01:18:49 am

1. I think you did a good job in proving your thesis in your secondary source. You used a popular television show that the majority of people are familier with and effectively showed how it includes gender roles.

2. Your thesis is good the way it is because it helps lead up to the effective points you make in your secondary source.

3. Maybe you can go into more detail about certain episodes like Raunaq suggested.

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